1.2.번
   #오버스럽게함.(저번주 보다 덜
   #몇개 다시말한거있음.

3.
this is picture taken outdoor.. boat
There r many p in this picture
In the middle of p. 2 우멘 r sitting at the table.
In the background of the p . Other.   Are standing
In the background of the p.
I can see some.. .mountain.


=> 1) 번복
        outdoor 에서 boat
     2)잘못된 용어(?)와 전치사생략
        boat (원래 on the boat나 배라고 말했어야...)
     3) 투 우먼이라고 말한 듯
     4) other이 아니라 the others
    
4. Indoors
There are many people in this picture
First thing I can see from this p is
2 people are standing at counter.
In the background of picture. I can see many people in line.

=> 1) 약간 버벅, 음..어.. 이런거 함..
     2) 내용 빈약?
     3)  i can see many people are in line

5.  콘서트장 얼마나 걸리고/ 얼마나 자주가는지
      i go to concert once a month

=> 1) 얼마나 걸리는지 말 안함.

6.  I go to concert with my friend
and We like music.


7 . 가격이외에 중요한 요소
there are factors I consider important.
First. I consider the quality of music...
u... becau... Because it is 게런티
Second. I think the interesting is Im....

=> 1) 어버버
     2) 말하다가 짤림. (is important)

8. 어..어,.........
       ........
.      .....on(시작날짜 말함).
  =>  1) 대답없다가 마지막에 그냥 시작날짜만 말함.
   # 이렇게 말했어야 했는데.
      the tour will start at 00
      and finish at 00
  #그런데, 이거 잘 안들림.. 이해 못함.

9. No. i'm afraid that  you have wrong imformation.
Actually. The000  is  on 000 A 0pm

=> 약간 문법 이상했음.

10. There r two 000
First
Next

= 무난

11.
I think more important is 체육클래스 for children.
Let me explain why thinkk this way
most of all,
students can focus better, and they will no be distracted by study. if a 체육클래스 provides healthy.
from my experience, when i was young.. when i was high school student, i took a 체유클래스 that.
for me, it was very helpful and healthy
because i was able to focus better, and i felt more comfortable and healthy.

on the top of that.
student can ...healthy.

therefore. i think this way